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Re: Fanfiction Club
Posted: Thu Oct 26, 2017 12:05 pm
by Kungfunaomi
PennyBassett wrote:Katie10 wrote:
Good should we write a Halloween fan fiction?
Yeah that could be fun!
One day Whit was walking. A creepy clown scared him. He had a heart attack and died. The end!
Re: Fanfiction Club
Posted: Thu Oct 26, 2017 7:17 pm
by Scientific Guy
Katie10 wrote:Good should we write a Halloween fan fiction?
"Okay, Whit, I'm closing up the shop!"
"Thanks, Connie! See you tomorrow!"
The bell chimed above the door as Connie exited the building. The shop was entirely empty, save for John Avery Whittaker standing in the kitchen, peering into the walk-in freezer. There was a "clack-lack" sound as Connie locked the door, and after... silence.
Peaceful, Whit thought.
Especially on a night as this. October 31st, the secular "Halloween." Whit did not celebrate, nor did he want to. He believed that all of the spiritual emphasis on that night was quite unholy for a
holiday. Plus, that night was at times a night of pranks, vandalism, and violence.
Which is why John Whittaker was redeeming the day by doing something wholesome at Whit's End.
"Strawberry... check." He ticked a box on his clipboard. "Rocky Road... check. Vanilla... check. Sherbet... out of sherbet." Whit scribbled down "Sherbet" on his clipboard. "Cappuccino Mocha Jamocha... check. Raspberry ripple..." Then he noticed something. "Hmm." Leaning toward the ice cream carton, Whit noticed a folded piece of paper sitting on top. He set his clipboard down, pulled the folded paper off, and opened it up. There were two words on it.
"BEHIND YOU."
Puzzled, Whit turned around, and—
That was all he remembered that night.
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So how's that?
Re: Fanfiction Club
Posted: Fri Oct 27, 2017 11:34 pm
by Katie10
Wow nice just make sure it is not to creepy and umm nice kungfunaomi.... Post your fan fiction by October 31st 12:00 Mountain time have fun!
Re: Fanfiction Club
Posted: Fri Oct 27, 2017 11:42 pm
by Katie10
Okay here's my fan fiction chapter one just there chapters. This is the short one. What do you guys think?
Re: Fanfiction Club
Posted: Wed Nov 01, 2017 1:14 am
by Kungfunaomi
Yeah so I vote we all start working on Christmas fanfictions because then I will have a month and a half to get it done... I can't do these on short notice. Probably would have done Halloween if I had been informed about it say at the beginning of October. So, I'm making a vote and I am going to start working on some kind of Christmas AIO fanfic. Short.
Re: Fanfiction Club
Posted: Wed Nov 01, 2017 6:40 pm
by PennyBassett
Yeah, that sounds a little more doable. I too would've been done by yesterday, if I'd had the time.
Re: Fanfiction Club
Posted: Thu Nov 02, 2017 10:39 pm
by GJFH
Kungfunaomi wrote:Yeah so I vote we all start working on Christmas fanfictions because then I will have a month and a half to get it done... I can't do these on short notice. Probably would have done Halloween if I had been informed about it say at the beginning of October. So, I'm making a vote and I am going to start working on some kind of Christmas AIO fanfic. Short.
Whale, I am definitely down for this.
I almost almost published something last year. It'll be sappy, I warn you.
Re: Fanfiction Club
Posted: Mon Nov 06, 2017 1:51 pm
by Kungfunaomi
GJFH wrote:
Whale, I am definitely down for this.
I almost almost published something last year. It'll be sappy, I warn you.
That's the whole point of Christmas fanfiction, duh
Let's make the deadline December 21st, then we all have a chance to read them before Christmas, agreed?
Re: Fanfiction Club
Posted: Mon Nov 06, 2017 5:44 pm
by Mr. Clever
Re: Fanfiction Club
Posted: Mon Nov 06, 2017 6:18 pm
by Jo March
Can I join this????
Re: Fanfiction Club
Posted: Mon Nov 06, 2017 10:53 pm
by Mr. Clever
To quote the words of Eugene "Cowardice loves company"! In other words, yes! I just quoted Eugene cause he's awesome and that quote kinda applied to this situation.
Re: Fanfiction Club
Posted: Tue Nov 07, 2017 1:39 pm
by Kungfunaomi
Oh that's ANNOYING!!!
That happened to me a few days ago when I was writing an essay for school. Note to self: draft in Notepad or Libreoffice then PASTE it into the thingy.
Jo March wrote:Can I join this????
No. You are not allowed to join, we are excluding you for no reason at all.
Sorry to poke you but why is this a question?? Of course you can join!!
TheDoctor wrote:To quote the words of Eugene "Cowardice loves company"! In other words, yes! I just quoted Eugene cause he's awesome and that quote kinda applied to this situation.
Yessssss
Re: Fanfiction Club
Posted: Wed Nov 08, 2017 9:14 pm
by Jo March
YAY!!! Thanks! I actually had a really good idea for a Christmas fanfic
Re: Fanfiction Club
Posted: Wed Nov 08, 2017 9:18 pm
by Scientific Guy
Oh, hold on, was I too late in submitting my excerpt? Was it any good?
Re: Fanfiction Club
Posted: Thu Nov 09, 2017 12:57 pm
by Kungfunaomi
Scientific Guy wrote:Oh, hold on, was I too late in submitting my excerpt? Was it any good?
The Halloween one was fine, man! Very in character, I admire you because you can do that and I can't. We're just starting working on Christmas fanfictions NOW because we have a much larger group with a lot more time to do it.
Re: Fanfiction Club
Posted: Fri Nov 17, 2017 12:28 am
by Mr. Clever
Ok so I rewrote most of it. Tell me what you guys think about it!
I'll probably have her walk to Whit's End and then she will "accidentally" get in the Room of Consequence and either see what it would be like if she married Mitch or she would see what it would be like if she never moved to Odyssey. Tell me what you guys think I should do and how I could improve!
Re: Fanfiction Club
Posted: Fri Nov 17, 2017 1:19 am
by GJFH
TheDoctor wrote:Ok so I rewrote most of it. Tell me what you guys think about it!
I'll probably have her walk to Whit's End and then she will "accidentally" get in the Room of Consequence and either see what it would be like if she married Mitch or she would see what it would be like if she never moved to Odyssey. Tell me what you guys think I should do and how I could improve!
I like this a lot! Great job at...expanding? If that's the word, on her circumstance by explaining why she was alone and progressing so that there was a little action and it wasn't stagnant. If there is one thing I would change, it's that you don't have to use Connie's name in every sentence even when you're writing about her. Of course, please don't assume you have to use twenty different synonyms or pronouns to avoid using it though.
Just keep it up, and keep reading it out loud to yourself, which is a way to catch things. It seems like you're going for a sort of It's a Wonderful Life feeling, which is always fun. Nice job, dude.
Re: Fanfiction Club
Posted: Fri Nov 17, 2017 4:05 pm
by Mr. Clever
GJFH wrote:TheDoctor wrote:Ok so I rewrote most of it. Tell me what you guys think about it!
I'll probably have her walk to Whit's End and then she will "accidentally" get in the Room of Consequence and either see what it would be like if she married Mitch or she would see what it would be like if she never moved to Odyssey. Tell me what you guys think I should do and how I could improve!
I like this a lot! Great job at...expanding? If that's the word, on her circumstance by explaining why she was alone and progressing so that there was a little action and it wasn't stagnant. If there is one thing I would change, it's that you don't have to use Connie's name in every sentence even when you're writing about her. Of course, please don't assume you have to use twenty different synonyms or pronouns to avoid using it though.
Just keep it up, and keep reading it out loud to yourself, which is a way to catch things. It seems like you're going for a sort of It's a Wonderful Life feeling, which is always fun. Nice job, dude.
Thanks! Also thanks for the advise! I will try to take out a few Connies. Also which way do you think I should go? Should I do the classic Christmas story and see what it would be like if she never came to Odyssey? You would see Wooton all alone and he wouldn't marry Penny because she introduced Wooton to Penny, Whit would have closed down Whit's end cause he could get any help and the kids would stop going, and Eugene wouldn't be a Christian because he would have never worked at Whit's end and he would have never meet Whit. Or she could see what it would be like if she married Mitch. She would be alone, unhappy, and she wouldn't have been in Odyssey to be with her mom that day before she died. So which one do you like better?
Re: Fanfiction Club
Posted: Sat Nov 18, 2017 11:20 pm
by Kungfunaomi
Aw man. So hard to choose! How about if she had never come to Odyssey, because there is little debate about how that would turn out. And it's the classic 'It's a Wonderful Life' scenario anyway.
Re: Fanfiction Club
Posted: Sun Nov 19, 2017 1:39 pm
by Jo March
Hey guys, just a heads up-- I have the second chapter of my fan-fic up in my topic!