Four Characters are trapped in an elevator...
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Bennett Charles would be scary to be in an elevator with!!!CreativeThinker101 wrote:Wooton
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they would all die!!!!
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How about...
Evelyn from Hear Me, Hear Me
The Clown at Burger World
Sir William from Isaac the Chivalrous
Benny Marks - one of the bad guys from Real Time - just for the irony
Evelyn from Hear Me, Hear Me
The Clown at Burger World
Sir William from Isaac the Chivalrous
Benny Marks - one of the bad guys from Real Time - just for the irony
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that would be so strange, funny though
Hmm..I don't know who could be in the elevator, but how about I write a fanfic for someone else's.
It wouldn't be too good, though. Working with characters would be hard.
It wouldn't be too good, though. Working with characters would be hard.
Brian Dern is simply one of the best characters ever so him stuck in an elevator would be the greatest things ever.
Connie is a spaz so she'd be hilarious to listen to.
Bernard's sarcasm would be a good addition to the episode.
Jason is another option. He'd be sarcastic like Bernard but he'd be calm and trying to find a way out. And I love his and Connie's chemistry.
Jay is one of the best kid characters.
Eugene is also a spaz. I like that.
Wooten would be even calmer than Jason. He's another good option.
This idea is so great. Someone who can actually write should totally do this. Write it and send a copy to Focus! Do it.
Connie is a spaz so she'd be hilarious to listen to.
Bernard's sarcasm would be a good addition to the episode.
Jason is another option. He'd be sarcastic like Bernard but he'd be calm and trying to find a way out. And I love his and Connie's chemistry.
Jay is one of the best kid characters.
Eugene is also a spaz. I like that.
Wooten would be even calmer than Jason. He's another good option.
This idea is so great. Someone who can actually write should totally do this. Write it and send a copy to Focus! Do it.
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i know right?!?! who wants to write it, is the question
I will.
However, I will need input from all of you guys! What you think specific characters would say, etc.
I'm thinking of doing Wooton, Connie, Jay, and Dern. I might do several, pick the best character combinations, and use them.
So, I might need help with some jokes Wooton might crack, some OUTRAGEOUS lines Dern might say, or some snarky comment Jay might have.
However, I will need input from all of you guys! What you think specific characters would say, etc.
I'm thinking of doing Wooton, Connie, Jay, and Dern. I might do several, pick the best character combinations, and use them.
So, I might need help with some jokes Wooton might crack, some OUTRAGEOUS lines Dern might say, or some snarky comment Jay might have.
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I started writing one. Here's how it starts:
SCENE 1
This scene takes place at Whit’s End. We hear kids in the background and the door occasionally open. The scene opens with Connie talking to Whit.
Connie: Hey Whit, I was wondering if I could leave early. Some friends invited me to go shopping at the mall with them.
Whit: Yes Connie, that’s fine. What time do you think you’ll be leaving?
Connie: (timidly) Well….my friends wanted me to meet them 15 minutes ago. Is it all right if I leave now?
Whit: *grandfatherly chuckle* of course you can. You better hurry though.
Connie: (excitedly) OH, THANKS WHIT *Connie hugs Whit*
SCENE 2
This scene takes place at the mall. The background is even noisier than Whit’s End.
Connie: Ahh! They must have gone on without me. Maybe they’re waiting at the food court.
*Connie runs to elevator*
Sound effect: elevator door opening
Connie: Bryan Dern? Wooton? What are you two doing at the mall?
Dern: (angrily) I’m trying to buy some new electronics, but these mall elevators are SOO SLOW!
Connie: And Wooton?
Jay: (shouting) HOLD THAT ELEVATOR DOOR! *gets in elevator* whew, oh hey Connie, hey Wooton, and hey random person.
Dern: The names Dern. NO AUTOGRAPHS!
Wooton: Oh, and Connie*snort* I was coming to buy some licorice, ketchup, candy canes, and barbeque sauce all for a new recipe I’m working on
Dern: Which floor, Connie? And Joe, or whatever your name is.
Connie: I’m going to floor 2, the food court.
Jay: It’s Jay, not Joe, or Jim, or Jerry! WHY DOES EVERYONE GET MY NAME MIXED UP. I’m getting off at floor 2 too.
*long akward silence*
Connie: Eek, I’m half an hour late. Can’t this elevator go any faster.
Dern: Nope, like I told you, slowest elevator ever.
Connie: I’ve been to the mall before, the elevators aren’t this slow.
Jay: I know what’s happened. The elevator’s stuck.
Wooton: Really? This is so cool, I’ve never been trapped in an elevator before. I gotta mark this down on my “Great Accomplishments” list.
Connie: You really think we are stuck?
Dern: Well, do ya feel the elevator moving.
Connie: Oh, no, my watch reads 4:50. The mall closes at 5:00 today because of some kind of holiday.
Jay: Sooo, we’re going to be trapped in this elevator all night.
Dern: yup, unless we can get someone’s attention, but these elevator walls are too thick…way to thick.
*another long akward pause*
Dern: I HATE getting stuck in elevators with annoying people.
Connie: Hey! That’s not nice.
Jay: You’ll be hearing from my lawyer about that…..if I had a lawyer, that is.
Wooton: HEY! Lets play a game! I spy with my little eye…..something that is the color silver.
Connie: Wooton, the whole elevator is silver.
Wooton: Oh yeah. Hey! We can play rock paper scissors.
Jay: Ooh, I love that game.
Wooton: Ready? Rock
Jay: Paper
Wooton: SCISSORS!
Jay: I put down scissors.
Wooton: And I put down rocks.
Jay: Scissors cut rock!
Wooton: Oh,man.
Dern: Hey, I’ve got some of my radio podcasts saved on my phone. We can listen to those.
Connie: NO!
SCENE 1
This scene takes place at Whit’s End. We hear kids in the background and the door occasionally open. The scene opens with Connie talking to Whit.
Connie: Hey Whit, I was wondering if I could leave early. Some friends invited me to go shopping at the mall with them.
Whit: Yes Connie, that’s fine. What time do you think you’ll be leaving?
Connie: (timidly) Well….my friends wanted me to meet them 15 minutes ago. Is it all right if I leave now?
Whit: *grandfatherly chuckle* of course you can. You better hurry though.
Connie: (excitedly) OH, THANKS WHIT *Connie hugs Whit*
SCENE 2
This scene takes place at the mall. The background is even noisier than Whit’s End.
Connie: Ahh! They must have gone on without me. Maybe they’re waiting at the food court.
*Connie runs to elevator*
Sound effect: elevator door opening
Connie: Bryan Dern? Wooton? What are you two doing at the mall?
Dern: (angrily) I’m trying to buy some new electronics, but these mall elevators are SOO SLOW!
Connie: And Wooton?
Jay: (shouting) HOLD THAT ELEVATOR DOOR! *gets in elevator* whew, oh hey Connie, hey Wooton, and hey random person.
Dern: The names Dern. NO AUTOGRAPHS!
Wooton: Oh, and Connie*snort* I was coming to buy some licorice, ketchup, candy canes, and barbeque sauce all for a new recipe I’m working on
Dern: Which floor, Connie? And Joe, or whatever your name is.
Connie: I’m going to floor 2, the food court.
Jay: It’s Jay, not Joe, or Jim, or Jerry! WHY DOES EVERYONE GET MY NAME MIXED UP. I’m getting off at floor 2 too.
*long akward silence*
Connie: Eek, I’m half an hour late. Can’t this elevator go any faster.
Dern: Nope, like I told you, slowest elevator ever.
Connie: I’ve been to the mall before, the elevators aren’t this slow.
Jay: I know what’s happened. The elevator’s stuck.
Wooton: Really? This is so cool, I’ve never been trapped in an elevator before. I gotta mark this down on my “Great Accomplishments” list.
Connie: You really think we are stuck?
Dern: Well, do ya feel the elevator moving.
Connie: Oh, no, my watch reads 4:50. The mall closes at 5:00 today because of some kind of holiday.
Jay: Sooo, we’re going to be trapped in this elevator all night.
Dern: yup, unless we can get someone’s attention, but these elevator walls are too thick…way to thick.
*another long akward pause*
Dern: I HATE getting stuck in elevators with annoying people.
Connie: Hey! That’s not nice.
Jay: You’ll be hearing from my lawyer about that…..if I had a lawyer, that is.
Wooton: HEY! Lets play a game! I spy with my little eye…..something that is the color silver.
Connie: Wooton, the whole elevator is silver.
Wooton: Oh yeah. Hey! We can play rock paper scissors.
Jay: Ooh, I love that game.
Wooton: Ready? Rock
Jay: Paper
Wooton: SCISSORS!
Jay: I put down scissors.
Wooton: And I put down rocks.
Jay: Scissors cut rock!
Wooton: Oh,man.
Dern: Hey, I’ve got some of my radio podcasts saved on my phone. We can listen to those.
Connie: NO!
Pretty good Woot, this is the best fan fiction I've read from you yet! I really could hear the characters saying those lines! Good job!
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Thanks, Godsgirl. i'll be posting some more another time
Haha! That was great.. Some of the character's reactions didn't seem like them. Some of Dern's reactions would've probably different.. I don't know.
But I liked it! Definitely wanna read more.
But I liked it! Definitely wanna read more.
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hey! pretty good!
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@Kaida, Yeah, it's really hard to get Dern just right.
@Connie, thanks
@Connie, thanks
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are you going to write anymore soon? i can continue it if you want
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hmm....I might right some more tomorrow, but feel free to write an "alternate ending"Connie_Kendall wrote:are you going to write anymore soon? i can continue it if you want
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alright, i'll think about it thanks!!
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Hil-LARIOUS. I have to hand it to you, Wooton, That was some of the finest fan fiction I've ever read. All the characters behaved believably like themselves, and were priceless.
Connie: "Look, let's... play twenty questions."
Wooton: "I can't count that high. Except when I'm walking past hotel doors, then I can count all the way to three hundred."
Connie: "Okay, I'm thinking of something."
Dern: "Me too. A lot of things."
Jay: "Is it big?"
Connie: "Yes."
Jay: "Is it loud?"
Connie: "Yes."
Jay: "Is it fat, annoying, have a high voice, generally late, serve ice cream portions too small, and happen to be wearing green?"
Connie: "No. And I'm done playing."
Jay: "Aw, life tis tragic."
Wooton: "Is it a big, loud, fat, annoying, high voiced, generally late person who serves ice cream?"
Dern: "Oh of all the..." * turns on radio podcasts*
radio podcast plays (music)
Dern: This is Cryin Bryan Dern, with the joke of the day.
*trumpet*
Dern: An ex inhabitant of Odyssey, some kid called Rusty Gordon... If that's his first name and he hasn't changed it he's gutless. If that's his writing name, he must be in need of shock therapy. Anyhow, his book is... (shouting) genius! And what's the joke? It's about how dead boring Odyssey is! And it blasts certain rather familiar characters, like "Candy Connel" and...
Connie: "Look, let's... play twenty questions."
Wooton: "I can't count that high. Except when I'm walking past hotel doors, then I can count all the way to three hundred."
Connie: "Okay, I'm thinking of something."
Dern: "Me too. A lot of things."
Jay: "Is it big?"
Connie: "Yes."
Jay: "Is it loud?"
Connie: "Yes."
Jay: "Is it fat, annoying, have a high voice, generally late, serve ice cream portions too small, and happen to be wearing green?"
Connie: "No. And I'm done playing."
Jay: "Aw, life tis tragic."
Wooton: "Is it a big, loud, fat, annoying, high voiced, generally late person who serves ice cream?"
Dern: "Oh of all the..." * turns on radio podcasts*
radio podcast plays (music)
Dern: This is Cryin Bryan Dern, with the joke of the day.
*trumpet*
Dern: An ex inhabitant of Odyssey, some kid called Rusty Gordon... If that's his first name and he hasn't changed it he's gutless. If that's his writing name, he must be in need of shock therapy. Anyhow, his book is... (shouting) genius! And what's the joke? It's about how dead boring Odyssey is! And it blasts certain rather familiar characters, like "Candy Connel" and...
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